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This…this…
Empty place in my soul
Is filling my mind
It's gone
Gone, nothing left but
Memories
The good,
The bad,
The funny,
The sad,
All of them,
That's all that's left.

The empty place
I have in my soul was
Once filled, filled with
Good times, Amazing
Times from this
Year
I would do anything
Not to part company with
These amazing people
Who have captured
My heart,
My mind,
My soul,
Who have made me
The person who I am
Today, the person
I call me.

Now, my soul is
Ripped apart,
Saying goodbye
Maybe for
Forever.
Forever.
Such a crazy word.
Maybe until
Next year.

This empty place in my soul,
I want it filled, yet
I don't, I don't want to
Replace those
Memories.
The good,
The bad,
The funny,
The sad,
Any of them.
They cannot be replaced.

Let me live!
My soul is crying,
Waiting for those amazing
People just to come back,
Take their rightful place
In my soul,
As my friends,
Irreplaceable friends.
My soul cries,
Screaming as it cracks
Yet some more,
Knowing that I won't
See many of these
Amazing
People for a long, long time,
Maybe never again.

Never again will
I ever let anyone steal my
Soul

What if, just what if,
I don't need
That part of my soul?
What if the people,
Those wonderfully
Amazing
People
Who have stolen bits
And pieces of
My soul
Need it more?
Maybe they need the
Memories too,
Because all that's left, are
Memories.
The good,
The bad,
The funny,
The sad.
All that's left, are
Memories.
I would like to dedicate this to my 8th grade graduating class.

Writing this...the words just flowed from my finger tips onto the keys, they never stopped coming. Yesterday and today were such fun times! I NEVER want to forget them. Tomorrow will be so sad, saying goodbye... it breaks my heart just thinking about it.

BUT when I think about it, I always tell myself to enjoy it while it lasts. Let the good times roll!

And YES it's really long, but I really couldn't condense it without taking out the meaning.

Opinions, as always, thanks! :D

(C) ME
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vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sorry for the mistakes. My phones being retarded.
-_-
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Froggygirl101 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha that's fine
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vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You have a good thought process going on however, my opinion is soul should be replaced with heart. Some lines are too wordy. For instance "who have made me the person who I am today" other's a better way to say that. Also try using other words than , people" and "amazing." Its sounds toorrepetitive. Lastly, work on how you split your lines. They sometmes represent short pauses. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings but if it was meant to be read like prose then it would nt be poetry...
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:iconfroggygirl101:
Froggygirl101 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! It's always good for me too hear suggestions.
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vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. Im hust glad ur not mad at me for trying to help or ststing my opinion. :) it happens alot on here
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Froggygirl101 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconvampiress-chic7:
vampiress-chic7 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And I apparently need to start proof reading my texting...:/ lmao
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lonewolfpuppy Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so sad and rings true to me - as I feel the exact same thing about my year group graduating this year. You have done an excellent job!

Also, I have linked your poem to my poem here: 'Without Goodbye' :D
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:iconfroggygirl101:
Froggygirl101 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

I read your poem and I love it(: :hug: thanks again!
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torimusician1997 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Tears...thats all i have to say
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